It doesn't matter what others think of your reading choices, as long as you love to read.
This board has amazing writefags, and OC is the lifeblood of the board, however, some people long to see stories about their waifus that writefags don't normally do.
In the same spirit as a Drawthread, this is for Violated Heroes to request stories they'd like to see written, or for new and old writefags to link their work for critique, or for others to enjoy.Shilling is encouraged!
If you have large amounts of text, or are running an update to stories, please consider posting it all to a pastebin and posting here when it is updated or finished.
Please keep things on topic. It's fine to talk about stories, characters, plots, etc, but keep the blog-posting out of here.
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First Tanuki free post. This dragon girl from Yugioh seems pretty interesting. She has fought so many (literal) dragons that she turned into a dragon girl. I wonder what kind of story you could make out of her? I'm not much of a write fag myself besides a few poems I wrote years ago. I'm merely throwing this into the pot for inspiration.
Female paladin that is getting a slowburn monsterization? Like, she defeats the dragons and that unleashes like a little explosion of energy that gets past her armor's enchantments against it. Eventually she just ends up raping her squire and starting a lair of her own.
Just spitballing here, might actually write a story about that, because I like slowburn transformations.
Bumping this idea
It's something I thought of for a while now, but would a modern day setting with monster girls have squads like the anon from pics related doing the exact same shit but with runaway sons instead?
I need some mad comfy good feels
Even if those are indeed real, I pray something like that never happens in a world of monstergirls. It shouldnt happen
This would be less private contractor work, and more RWDS stuff. Not happy ending things.
Glad this shit isnt real, he wrote pretty convincingly though
I thought it might have some decent hijinks potential. My bad, fellas.
Jesus Christ that is vile
However, a sterilized version of this with mg squads retrieving their clients’ sons or prospective husbands from either their own domiciles or (in the case of rebellious sons) secret handholding clubs has some potential.
The idea of a highly secretive club where tired husbands/boyfriends just hold hands or play patty-cake is hilarious to me.
>handholding and playing patty cake with other dudes
Bump with cross-posting from the Greentext Thread:
Superheroine bunnygirl falls in love with a not-so-villanous villian (Saturday Morning Cartoon style).
I hope you like it, even though I could've done better in terms of Saturday Morning Cartoon atmosphere.
Oh yeah, I'd like to write an ending too, but which one do you like best?
Villain end: The Count Vice introduce his new Evil Partner in crime: Lethal Lazuli.
Hero end: Lago Lazuli teams up with the unexpected Count Valor.
Neutral end: MG North's newest super couple is a little odd. But they're madly in love, that's for sure.
I have an idea for a lion girl story with parts being them meeting in highschool and married life after. What's the best way to get to all points. Should I do a flashback to how they met or just do a time skip at a few points?
Personally, I just think it's funny that there are entire secret societies dedicated to handholding because their waifus won't do it.
As you didn't give much information, I'll just say in just a general sense you should keep a story chronological unless you have very good reason not to. Else you risk either confusing readers or pissing them off.
Any word on these two stories prompts from the previous thread?
>Dragon waifu's father was killed by a dude and she goes to kill said dude only to find he's survived by a son and has to decide how to deal with that situation.
>David Lynch style murder mystery with quirky townfolk and weird happenings in some small mountain town featuring some monstergirls.
I was thinking something more along the lines of “Rebellious son runs away from arranged marriage with Demon to go desperately assert his freedom by holding a bunch of girls’ hands in Europe like a MANWHORE.”
Instead of being brainwashed into compliance upon return, he just gets raped into submission by his now-slightly-more-yandere-and-justifiably-so bride to be.
Shit, i forgot to add "with human women". I only now realize that it makes it sound gay as fuck.
Fuck me, that's awful.
I was kinda thinking something along the lines of "Rebellious son runs away from home in order to join a chaste temple in bumfuck nowhere" or boys getting radicalized by nearby palladin sects or something. Or actual kidnapping by isolated San Francisco-esque mini towns where the victims get stockholmed and force-fed soylent.
Just remembering the Transylvanna, and Most Wanted stories in hopes the writefags remember and continue the stories, or somebody else maybe takes inspiration.
They seemed like good holiday times…
I wrote a story based around a homebrew version of MGE mixed with some of my own shit.
https://pastebin.com/3QRviKYr pls enjoy
>local man BTFOs orgasm denial fetishists out of sheer rage
Someone watched Troy before writing this
Here's a short valentines day writefag involving a qt3.14 Jinko
Haven't finished any writefags a lot lately
This is good shit, minisatan. I like how the jinko decided to take the gentler approach. And thanks to the mc for asking the real questions.
Are there any stories or greentexts involing Ren Xiongmao's? I got a mad case of panda fever that won't stop.
not mg related but do you have more of those contractor stories? theyre entertaining as all fuck
I remember one from the hellhole that was the old MGEwiki’s fanfic section. Plot was basically:
>local village is negotiating with nearby demon realm for trade
>one of the villagers at negotiations is an awkward farmer’s son
>Ren Xiongmao is one of the mg negotiators
>she starts flustering the farmboy, who can’t handle it and has to leave
>hijinx ensue and the village gets invaded by order and demon realm forces simultaneously
>Farmboy is lost in the confusion, found by the same Ren Xiongmao, and proactive dated
It’s probably lost in the ether somewhere, but it was one of the better stories in a sea of cringe.
Only ones I know exist. Sorry, pal.
>Getting pre-consent sexed in the middle of a battlezone
Ambassadors are truly next level
Is that what the feminists are calling it now.
Do any of you have advice as how to be a writefag?
Write. No seriously, just write. It may be utter trash, but you’ll get better and better at it with time. Write something, anything at least once a day
>Is that what the feminists are calling it now.
Only when it's muds.
>proof-read at least once after you're done with it
>read stuff you like and try to analyze what makes you like it
Also, sauce. IQDB didn't work.
I only do this beause you understood I was joking. Remove spaces. Standard warnings apply.
http s://ww w.pixiv .net/member_illust.php?mode=m edium&illust_id=73302979
Also, removing the https://www. is enough to remove the hyperlink, you can just post it like pixiv.net/member_illust.php?mode=medium&illust_id=73302979
I made a first bit of writing on this idea, mostly introducing the squire and the knight. I'm currently keeping the fights between the paladin and the dragons vague, as they don't really matter.
What do you guys think, anything I should change?
Nice! Though how do male harems work here, other than being in suspended animation for the daughters.
>Though how do male harems work here
Hey, do any of you guys buy those monster girl books on Amazon? Any of them worth it?
I got them. They're worth getting into in my opinion.
They really don't. Dragons are kind of defaulting to worst girls in this, so you don't feel bad about them dying in large amounts. I'm planning on making Elloy, as an ex-paladin, more monogamic.
read stories you enjoy to get a sense of "style" I like Brandon Sanderson books,(though he lately got bullied into accepting homos. I prefer his old school Mormon "nope" stance, but as far as I can tell he only has one homo in all of his books and he's a nobody character with no stake in anything and no POV)
I wrote a lot before I showed anyone my stories, because most of them are bad. You'll suck at first, but you need to get past that to get good. Also don't try for an epic fantasy as your first story. I mean you can, but you won't finish it, and it will discourage you. Write short stories first, 20 pages max. Just getting done with it will make you happy and you'll be more likely to start another one. Its easier to write six 10,000 word stories over one 60,000 word story
which ones specifically? If any of you have one on there, shill it to me, and I might buy it
Both encyclopedias. You'd get some updated art on Gargoyle and Red Oni and I like the translations a bit better than the web ones. There's also some lore if you're into that but if that's not enough you might wanna skip.
oh, I have those. I meant the books written by fans. The novels.
on top of revising, don't immediately go back and revise something, let the story sit for a few days before you go back over it
that way your mind wont gloss over everything you just wrote since it's still fresh in your memory, you'll catch spelling/grammar mistakes easier doing that
Its a good idea, its just… those were so horrific. So horrific in fact it makes professional kidnappers look like heroes
I swear I'm not dead you guys.
Also, I would have written and posted this a week ago, but some dumb shit happened at work which made me lose the motivation to write it for a few days, and by the time I got my motivation back, it was a few days before Valentine's Day and I didn't want to rush things.
Now this was fucking QUALITY, m8. Keep it up.
bumping for first one
Out of all the yugioh cards you could have waifu'd, you chose a shitty level 8 vanilla tuner. For shame dude, for shame.
Well, I tried my hand at some writefaggotry, I don't know what I was doing honeslty.
Here it is
I probably shouldn't have made my first story end in a cliff hanger but oh well
It's because she has a relevant back story. she's a trade in target at least. I am aware of many yugioh waifus of which the majority fall under the dark mage category. Here are a few examples of ones that don't with the exception of summon sorceress perhaps someone could write a story about one of those?
What kind of dumb shit happened at work? Is there something you would like to talk about? /monster/ has your back anon. Enough good writefags have already killed themselves because they realized their waifus in their stories wouldn't real.
I came up with another story prompt that I'm sure /monster/ will hate. Basically, sometime in the mid to late 1800's there is a fellow who is a Van Helsing like character with the personality of One Punch Man's Sataima. He's been tasked by the church to rid the world of abominations and that's pretty much all he does 24/7. Essentially he's the reason why monstergirls don't exist in any capacity in our current universe. I had a whole montage in my mind of him traveling across the world and dispatching monstergirls of all kinds in a variety of gruesome ways with an aurora of callous indifference.
To cater to the /monster/ audience this would have to be a prelude of sorts since I don't think anyone would care that much for a story about a guy who only goes around killing monstergirls rather than loving them. To make it work, it would have to lead into some kind of ancestry gag wherein some distant offspring of monsters long since slain attempt to take revenge on the decendant that killed thier ancestors and it'd devovle into some comedy/harem antics of some sort I think.
Unlike the "you killed my father!" dragon lady prompt which would be more dramatic this would be more of an excuse for a gags and such. My humor is rather dark so I figure the prelude may be too uncomfortable for some to indulge in but I like the concept of dealing with uncomfortable situations laid at your feat by ancestors you never knew..
I updated this little project of mine
If any of you could give some feed back I would very much appreciate it.
I'm interested though, please continue.
Regarding the setting, the guy has a car and driver's license but he's using a spear, and has no such thing as a gun, or a phone? Did he lose them?
Also, might wanna check the punctuation and pacing on some of the lines.
welp, I wrote another update It takes a while to write doesn't it?
Thanks. I haven't edited the older parts yet but I've tried to have better grammar in this new one, by which I mean I looked up grammar and used the first thing I saw as a guide.
I was looking for names that meant wolf and I saw 'adolf" and 'adolph'
I think he assumed you put Hitler’s and Heinrich Himmler’s names together
Well that got really weird really quickly
We must secure the existence of our waifus and a future for awoo children
What would be Hitlers favourite monster?
Dragons, most likely. They give off an extreme amount of pride and are not afraid to be nationalistic. Also, most of them are white. I can see Hitler respecting other monsters as well. An example of another one is the titania. Also I can see him respecting most of the monsters from Zipangu, like the Ochimusha and Ryu as in real life, he respected the japanese.
Well I’m inclined to say Jinkos based on his love of tigers
Or, on a more serious note, a Leanan Sidhe.
I think Eva Braum would be an Angel for him. Though I now wonder what the other guys would have gotten
Another update. I think this is the larged update yet.
I am 100% confident that unless you write some corny bullshit to get out of that cliffhanger, you have written yourself into a corner.
That, or muhfuggen wizard is actually the MC.
>you have written yourself into a corner.
I still like Harpies, I think they're probably one of the things that got me in to monstergirls.
Do you play harpies in yugioh? Have you considered any other monster girl archtypes?
*Adolf is hitting it from behind*
<"MY TRANSMISSION IS BROKEN!"
Based on an idea I've had for a little while but couldn't find the motivation to put together until now
king tiger girl when?
graf zeppelin comes to mind, even if she is a boat girl.
Well, I wrote some corny bullshit, enjoy
>*Adolf is hitting it from behind*
>what’s a greentext
Yeah! What the hell is green text??? They have nothing like this on Tumblr or Reddit. it's crazy!
Ironic shitposting is still shitposting.
Well that was not the direction I expected this to go
He's not dead yet
Had an idea about big story about a anti-monster society getting screwed up when one of the daughters of their elites turns out to be a lilim daughter of the demon queen with her magic sealed. The event that reveals this and breaks the seal results in several conversions and at least one alping.
Lots of jealous Monster s writing stories here. I always see something like "boobs that would make a succubus jealous" or so and so thing would put a succubus to shame
Especially since it's the cowgirls who have the mega-milkers
I don't know what I was thinking with this update.https://pastebin.com/9gu74rfL
Thoughts on my story? Leave feedback as needed.
Pretty good. I hope you update soon.
Guys i am looking for a story named Pretty boy
Its about a male companion and a kitsune. Can somebody give me a link?
Oh my god, thank you
Windows deleted all of my shit now i have to download all the shit that was lost.
Ammit bless (You)
Interesting story, I'll be waiting for updates as well
Some dialogue and words (like "traitor) repeat a bit too often, sometimes even in the same paragraph. The switch from first person to third person is also a tad weird but not bad.
Did not care for tbh. Too much gay shit.
Kinda the point. It's supposed to be shit shock humor.
In the previous thread someone asked for a dragon femdom story.
I wrote something back in that thread but I didn't know anymore where to go with that story so I decided to start again from scratch.
Feedback is always appreciated
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Speaking of boat girls, I wrote this small short story. It's kind of sad so I will be spoilering it.
Imagine looking into your ship's eyes as she is sinking, desperately trying to hold on, it's too heavy and as she starts to pull you down you hear her start to gasp for air. You know you can't hold her up, you know this is your last moments together, but you can't bring yourself to let go. One of your other boat girls knows that if you keep holding on to her, you will die too… She does what she does not want to do. She pulls you away from your sinking boat girl. You struggle, kick, and scream orders at her to stop what she is doing but she defies them. She doesn’t want to lose you any more than you want to lose your sinking ship girl. As you are finally forced away from her you see her fall off into the cold black abyss of the ocean. You attempt to jump in after her, but your other boat girls stop you. You know it is too late. With tears in your eyes you embrace one of your other boat girls and blame yourself for her death. c-cupids exist for a reason, r-right guys?
Hello hi etc
Tags: MGE, Salamander, Bicorn, Yuri, FFM
Synopsis: A bicorn and a knight go into an abandoned castle in search of what their contractor demanded. In their search, they find a salamander down on her luck looking to beat them to what loot they must be after.
Could anyone point me to the stories with the CEO anon and the snek girl? Take a smol tsun snek as payment
Well, it's been a few days but I finally got around to righting another update, I think this will be the ending of my first story. So what did you guys think? I hope it entertained you if nothing else.
anyone here happen to have the one pastebin about the veteran and the catgirl and chesire?
Holy shit I remember this author and their stories. All of them are so fucking good but they always end up not finished. Like the veteran one doesn’t reveal stuff about what happened to him and where his wife went. It’s like their good but there’s never a resolution, every story ends on a cliffhanger that by going by when the stories were made are never going to be finished and satisfied. Is there any other place where the author put their stories, somewhere they might have finished them?
Does anybody have a link to that story about an either hellhound or manticore pov that works in the mafia or something like that and buys a shota who is blind? I've been having a really hard time finding it.
Reading all these makes me want to try to write one up. But I've never posted a story before so it'd probably be trash.
Do it. Write it down, then edit it to fix mistakes and inconsistencies.
Well alright. I got an idea in my head I'll type it out when I get home. If I have the willpower I'll put it up on a pastebin.
Are there any good, preferably non-lewd stories involving a griffon?
Also, I recall reading a story a year, year and a half or so ago about a space junker that gets captured by pirates led by a hellhound; I believe it was posted directly to a thread, no pastebin, but I cannot for the life of me find it.
There was a short story about a thief trying to steal from a griffon’s hoard, but I don’t have the pastebin bookmarked.
I had a moment of panic thinking I'd spelled griffin wrong multiple times in my story. Turns out it has multiple different spellings so we're both right.
I've posted my story a few different times across the write thread whenever I updated it. The previous thread should have the most up to date version. Ctrl+F griffin and you'll find it. I recommend the .pdf since that should have the most grammatical fixes and of course overall better presentation. If you've already read it, I hope you enjoyed it.
stop teasing and update soon
>This girl comes up to you on a comfy but hot Saturday evening while you are at a bar.
>"Hey kid, buy me a drink. You won't regret it."
>What do you do, /monster/?
Honestly the story was crap so I killed it
I have this issue with writing where I want to write whatever I'm writing in one go. For college assignments and whatnot this works fine but for stories they just end up being rushed
Buy her a drink obviously.
Onis like whiskey too, yeah?
She better not be a jack-swilling pleb, though.
If she is going to drug and rayp me she ought to be buying, though I guess since it's for her she's going to get strong and do it anyways
I would like to see it resurrected
got the idea from cleaning a rusty scissor with a rust remover spray
>you spray the dust remover all throughout the metal exterior
>her high pitched digital yelp breaks the silence
>one would think you would need to disable the circuits in order to clean better, without any interruption, and that is what mothers do to clean their daughters' insides
>your wife, however, refuses to do so
>she claims she doesn't like it, but, you being a human, she'd feel safer being able to tell instantly if you do anything wrong
>still, her lacks of commentary besides moans and cries makes you doubt her statements
>gently, you scrap the rust off
>next you clean it off with a rag
>the metal already looks shiny and clean
>you proceed further into her insides, gently cleaning her sensitive bits with care and an alcohol solution
>the first time you did this you thought you were sending her into a roller coaster of emotions
>as you got used to her you slowly learned that all those emotions were actually just pleasure
>as your cleaning goes on, the insides get cleaner, but the outside gets messier
>you apply the last bit of metal polish and look up at her face
>she can't resist any longer, and the sigh of her in this state never fails to make you want to indulge her
>you take her then and there, making full use of the wd-40 in her joints
>finally, she uses her legs to hold you in as you let yourself fall on top of her, basking in the afterglow and enjoying the faint vanilla scent coming from her insides
>you'll probably have to clean her again because of how messy it was
>and you wouldn't have it any other way
I don't want to fuck a scissor, I just want to clean an automaton in a lewd way.
Alright guys, take it ez on me. I finally got the time to sit down for an hour or two to put down my idea. It ain't much. It probably feels rushed, but this is my first time so please enjoy if you can.
>I just want to clean an automaton in a lewd way
Gonna end up needing one of these along the way
>Bentou is just blocks of ice
Got a kek out of me, I like it.
That said, you gotta work on spacing whole paragraphs from each other. The end of the story where his sis gets decked had me a bit confused on who was being decked at first. You're well on your way anon, just watch out for random meme arrows and asterisks for actions.
Thanks I'll take your advice to heart for sure. Just glad I got someone to chickle.
Victory and Defeat, chapter 12. Last chapter, missing a little epilogue. Derrota's story is now basically done.
good shit and cute
Good, shit or cute? It can't be all three, Anon.
I also enjoyed this, original story idea and solid writing.
Here's my short medusa story. Havn't done in writing in a long time, and I wrote half of it on my tablet so there's probably some errors I didn't see.
Also looking for some more writing prompts
YouTube embed. Click thumbnail to play.
Nice story. Kind of left me wanting more.
How about giving this a shot?
Ok guys here's the deal. I was just looking around some old computer stories I used to type up just for fun when I came across this one. It's got like 50000 or more words in it and this is just a 5000 word clipping from it.
I remember I was writing it out like a visual novel story where I'm typing up the common route and then was just gonna type up a route for each girl for the fun of it. It's taken heavy inspiration, if not just straight up ripped from Monster Musume and MGE but to suit my own plot I adjusted shit the way I wanted it.
If anyone actually says, "Hey, I'm interested in this. Put the rest of it on that pastebin so I can read about the other five girls and stuff man."
Then I'm definitely willing to do that, but I'm gunna read through and fix any grammer errors and shit first. If it sucks ass I'll just let it rot in my hardrive never to be seen again.
>tldr if you like it and want the 45000 other words let me know and I'll post it
Really good twist at the end, good characterization. You seem talented enough to make another chapter of this.
I do think you cut short the stalking phase a bit short for us yandere fans. Have you perchance written other medusa fics in the past?
I have not written anything /monster/ related in the past. I've just been really into medusas recently.
I really enjoyed it. Would definitely read more of it if you decide to put it up.
Hey thanks bro. I'll see if I can't make a part two.
Glad to hear it man, really. Alright when I get home from work today I'll put the rest of it up.
Cute. I liked how the serpants played a major role.
Doin the pastebin again is probably retarded but who cares.
Alright after four hours of going through and fixing errors and other shit I posted everything I had typed up. Hell I might actually continue on with the story and update it now and then, readin it got me pumped up boys. I hope you all enjoy what I got so far, I'll post again when I finally finish this. Funny what you find at the bottom of your old documents folder.
Carrie is best girl. She's a bit shy, but I bet she's a freak in bed.
At least during the day…
more seriously, I do hope you continue
That gif got me good. I'll try to type up a bunch this weekend. Maybe after I'm done just finishing off the common route I'll put a poll up to see what girl's route we should go down first. God I wish I could draw I woulda made this an actual VN.
I do hope you're going to write a part where Ona apologizes to Zasha because that was just straight-up bitchy
Preesh man. We'll see, they do hate eachother. Maybe Bull will fix it maybe he wont. I doubt Ona's orc warrior pride would allow herself to say she's wrong after all.
I finally Updated the story, haven't had any time between the 60 hours of OT , studies and gym. The common route is finished so I'm gunna start working on each girl's route. In fact I thought it'd be kind of fun to let anyone here who gives a shit about the story pick which route I was gunna write first.
Now I'm probably gunna just write fun and cutesy scenes for the routes so don't expect any 2deep4u feels or nail biting drama. I'm a hack and couldn't write that kind of shit up. It'll probably be more like an afterstory than anything of you think about it. I'll check the polls Friday and start writing whoever is top waifu.
I voted Chelsea but deep down I want the Zasha route too…
Fuck, I want them all actually
Don't sweat it man. I plan on doing them all, kind of like alternate time lines. If you guys like this stuff I don't mind to post all the ending as I finish each one's. I even have a secret one planned up. I'm real glad you liked it enough to vote though.
I voted. I'm looking forward to the next bit.
Thanks man, you guys turn this from me making this for shits and giggles to something I actually want to try amd make good.
Gorgon route? :^)
To be honest I have no idea who to pick. Fuck you for writing too many likable characters. But seriously good job
that obvious huh?
Ha thanks man.
Awesome stuff man, voted for the banshee, I'm a sucker for sad lonely girls.
I wonder how she we'll react to the (you), here's hoping she will spill her spaghetti HARD.
I have the beginning already thought out for that one but I wont spoil anything.
Ah fuck I accidentally voted Cindy, recount 1 please
Don't have an account. But I'll take a vote off Cindy on Friday and vote for who you want. Who did you want?
if you think it is crap, and don't know how to fix it, our writing will not improve until you get feedback.
MC is over the top, but in a fun way. why do i think that this will wind up more interesting than most MG VNs on patreon?
I hope it'll live up to your expectations. I wish I could draw, I would have put it in VN format for everyone.
Behold, more short stories I have written.
Mermaid story that was requested by a friend: https://pastebin.com/akt3UJNa
Anubis story: https://pastebin.com/pBd86gGb
I will warn that the anubis story includes light femdom elements and I've never really written a sex scene before this, but here it is.
Also updated the medusa story but I'm thinking about writing a lot more so I won't post it yet.
Also might work on a weresheep story from her point of view but I don't know if I'm feelin it. If someone says they're interested I'll probably go for it again.
Neato, thanks anon!
Could someone beta read this? I was told my series started from a boring place, so I thought this would be a better starting point.
The medusa story was good anon. Keep up the work. As others said, neat use of head sneks.
Nice job on your first sex scene, that was pretty good
> “Oh, I love it when you struggle~”
I think I like Anubis's now. Bless you anon, that tugged at my heart strings
I found no basic spelling mistakes other than "kina" insted of "kind of" but im sure that was intentional. I can't help more than this since im not a native english speaker nor do i know anything about writefagging.
I was more asking how to tell the story better, but okay.
lots of run-on sentences and awkeard sentence structure.
as an example, "I look at the picture on my nightstand looking back was my husband and I holding a trophy as the first cursed gun to ever win a match."
Would read a lot better if it were. "I looked over at the picture on my nightstand. Staring back at me was my husband and I holding a trophy. I was the first cursed gun to win a match."
but even that is kind of clunky. A bit more description and prose would go a long way.
"With a heavy sigh, I shifted in my bed, looking over at the picture on my nightstand. Staring back at me was my husband with a smiling face. And there I was, by his side as always holding a trophy. I was the first cursed gun to win a match."
Also, its just a general opinion of mine, but stay away from present-tense. That's really more for screenplays and scripts. Whenever I read it outside of those it just looks horribly unprofessional and reads awkwardly
I can't edit my post, but there should be a comma after "always" in my last example. Also awkward is spelled wrong in the first sentence.
>yes, yes I am
I like it.
Finally was convinced to write and post. Just a super short story about a guy and his kitsune GF.
Any feedback or suggestions would be appreciated
Sick story man. I'd definitely read any others you made. Got a laugh and a warm feeling. That's a goody.
Glad people like it, I'll try to keep the good stuff going.
The sequal "only one guy who probably gave up all interest in seeing it after all this time" has asked for. Just a little after story. May or may not be good I used a few lunch breaks to type it and read over it.
I´d like to see a story with a "Going his Own Way" commentator getting proactively dated mid show.
>"ALL MAMONO ARE THOTS PRE SUFFRAGETTES!!! You think your waifu loves you? Wait until she gets voting rights! She´ll take you to Divorce Court faster than you can say "B… But my spirit mana…" "
>"Fools are falling head over heels for these bitches! They think "Finally, a woman with common sense! We don´t have to take our women´s rights, folks!", but´s that´s just the rub. They figured out the fastest way to strip a man from his resources a long time ago, and that´s chameleon… Wait, what´s that noise on my window? Hold on a sec…"
Here's the continuation of the medusa story for anyone who asked for it. Maybe I'll keep it going, not sure yet.
Feedback appreciated I suppose.
Where's the pastebin, banchou-bro? You holding out on us?!
Holy shit brahsky I didn't even notice.
Sorry to cock tease everyone like that.
Bernadette won, I'll start workin on her route but I got shot in the leg so I might be a little destracted.
Now I have some good info about bein shot though. Thanks for reading my shit guys. I got a fracture in the femur from the bullet so I'll have to type shit on the phone since 90 degree angles suck right now. It'll be a bit slower cause of that.
ok take your time… baka
Life imitates art, or something like that. Just don't die!
Did you accidentally shoot yourself setting your gun down?
man, /monster/ is one crazy place.
Praying for you anon. Hope you get better soon
Niggers just are pussies that's all I'll say. Only get into a fistfight with other white guys. I'm lucky as hell though, clean fracture, missed anything important. Not trying to blog guys sorry.
Holy shit are you ok anon?
>Writefag got shot by a nigger
Fucks sake niggers and kikes really are why we can't have nice things, even here.
Well what did you expect?
Damn son, heal up.
Thanks guys. It's really wasn'r as bad as I thought it'd be you know? I mean it hurt like fuck but I was still able to keep calm and crack jokes. Panicing woulda bleed my ass out quicker after all. Does anyone have any pastebins or greentexts for monster girl nursing their potential husband back to health? Top points if they're: arachnie, Yuki-Onna, undead girl, harpy
I love Chrome
What caliber? I need to know for science.
>Hi-Point. .40. (Imagine that) 20 dolla problem solva
The dumbass didn't know shit about guns, he pulled it out of his pants to show off how thug he was and it went off at my leg. He looked like he pissed himself and ran off. I could tell by his face and how he ran off afterwards he didn't even mean to shoot the damn thing. For real done blogging this time just a bit pissed and need to seethe at something sorry guys.
Its fine considering the circumstantial circumstances
Not an arachne, but I've got an Ushi-Oni one by Ace: https://pastebin.com/NMyy5fiN/
That was nice, thanks man.
I'm enjoying it, and I want more matchmaking shenanigans.
The best girl in that god forsaken game. She doesn't have any disgusting scenes, as far as I am aware.
Nice story. I can't say I've ever been a large fan of spider girls but this was a pretty cute story. I recall reading this other story about a young man in Zipangu getting capture by an Ushi Oni. The only thing I can remember about it is both of the young man's parents were samurai and his mom gets turned into an Ushi Oni. Does anyone have this story?
Glad you're enjoying it.
Here's the third version of the medusa story I've been writing.
Feedback and comments appreciated as always
I've seen quite a few monstergirl stories in my time but even so I've found the Sabbath, or just lolis in general, to be quite underrepresented. When they are featured it's usually in humorous one offs or as side characters to the greater story. Does anyone have any stories that feature them as the main romantic interest? Or is this just one of those things that just doesn't have a lot of demand?
Or option C: I get off my ass and write my own story.
Why are loli monstergirls so underrepresented? Because they're lolis. Certain people get buttmad like crazy if you try and have a serious thread about them. They inevitably troll and call everyone pedos and cause the threads to spiral into shit slinging. You might be able to pull one off if you're very iron-fisted about shit posting and anti-pedo posting in the OP.
There's also the fact that lolis are niche in an already niche genre (monstergirls). So that means an even smaller potential audience, to begin with. You could probably mostly get around this if the story is especially well written.
I saw a Redcap appear in a CYOA story just recently, and someone started crying about it being a loli monstergirl instead of an adult-looking monstergirl variety.
I got you fam: https://pastebin.com/nYAePkDg
shillin' my own work. Features loli Baphomet doctor healing a Dark Knight Anon.
That was good stuff my man. Thanks for posting it.
Oh I remember this, this is really good Anon and I hope you write more stories about the sabbath, because lolis are definitely underrepresented.
Much thanks for the story, anon!
Oh hey, that story. Man I haven't written anything but Wizardquest stuff in awhile, huh?
Let's see what it's in relation to-
Holy fuck, glad to see you're okay tho. Only other medical related story I have the Code Wight, but I'm not certain it fits with what you're looking for. Get healed up soon, friendo.
Which CYOA? I don't think I've had people cause a fuss about a loli character in one of those before…
This thread is encouraged to shill, yo.
Good shit mate, hope to read more from you.
Also good shit. I was never much of a fan for lolis but this one tickled me in a way. Also damn you for now having a damn fascination on those damned smug goats!
Hello, here is more garbage I have written as I take a break from the medusa story.
Didn't use MGE as a base for once and wrote it from the kitsune's point of view.
I'll be getting back to finishing up Anon and Selene's story soon enough for any of you that care.
m8 why not make an account for all these?
fairly rough criticism spoilered:
You mentionned that this was written as a "break", and sadly, it shows. The story isn't bad, but it's bland, there is no surprise, nothing that makes it stand out. On the good points, I haven't noticed a single mistake, be it spelling or grammar, so that's actually great.
As a short story written to relax, it does its job and I'm sure some Anons just enjoy these kind of things, but I'm definitely more demanding.
Huge thanks to all of you for reading and commenting, please don't hesitate to tell me what parts you liked best or even the weaker ones, you guys are amazing and I wish you the best.
Funnily enough I actually don't like the Baphs that much, so while I will write more about Sabbath and lolis, I don't think SmugGoats will be part of it.
In fact, my next work will feature a (loli)DarkElf, it should be done before the week-end.
Have a great one, monster-fuckers.
I have them saved elsewhere, but I can make an account to help other people keep track of my work.
I honestly debated posting it in the first place, as it was just supposed to be a cute little thing and some practice before I get into the heavier shit in my main project.
I'll keep what you said in mind the next time I work on a shorter story.
Don't worry about it, writing like we do here should be a hobby one does for fun.
You can concern yourself with top quality when you plan on publishing stories more seriously.
I'm really just happy people actually read what I write! I can't get my friends to read my more serious writings which is pretty disheartening. Especially when you worked on it for like a year. /blogpost
I will say this, while eternal loli™ is nice and all, blood related incest is still fucked.
Futhermore dicking the blood related loli-aged loli is /gas/-tier.
Not telling you what to do, just a reminder.
I see, you are a man of culture as well.
Have no fear, my set of rules is kinda loose as I'd write about a lot of weird shit, but I'd never writefag about: incest or underaged children. So yeah… /monster/ core values, no /d/ or /chaos/.
what ever happened to my boi bromont, haven't read his shit in years but I cant seem to track down his pastebin or whatevs
The yandere subtones where left hanging
The mc just went with the flow with little resistance in my opinion.
But I liked nevertheless
Hello everyone. >>388238 here, two months on-and-off, I finally fucking conquered my laziness, and got that larger project of mine done. Time for some green-skinned-space-babe-babymaking!
I don't care how bad any mistakes are or if things are inconsistent, I thank Mama Reitia that I actually finished this project this time!
Hey fuckers I wrote this up on my phone and read over it a couple times and I got something half complete on the back burner but jesus fuck typing on your phone sucks man. I'm gunna see the doc tomorrow and if the news on the fracture is good I'll sit at my computer and finish the Bernadette story.
Here's your theme bro
get a targus bluetooth keyboard, it's much better for phone typing.
It was pretty good anon. My only complaint is that this nihilus character seemed overly vague, as well as their reasons for being afraid of him and russet leaving. Their reaction when the video hit the news seemed over the top because we didn’t know why he had so many powerful enemies. We knew he had served in the navy for a brief while and did operations against pirates but that seems to be the extent of it.dont get me wrong I liked it, the ending just felt a little hamfisted
I thought I had made it apparent with the breadcrumbs I've scatted throughout the story that Russet personally pissed off an abusive asshole dictator who has a soviet-tier hard-on for military equipment and force.. It honestly makes me regret not keeping something I cut in the end: Where Russet reveals his Navy experience is in fact as a teenage conscript of the Nihilus Legion.
Another flaw in this story, is that I feel I should've dropped more hints that Russet is being a deliberately unreliable narrator. I'm not sure how I would've done that though.
I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I got that he was some kind of dictator or pirate lord, but I didn’t understand why they were so scared of him, I don’t recall anything that indicated how powerful he really was or anything showing how ruthless he was willing to be that would explain why they were so terrified of him.
Maybe it was just cause I was a bit short on sleep I didn’t notice but that’s what it seemed like.
As promised: https://pastebin.com/WuX9qCp8 Anon is a slave to a beautiful and greedy Dark Elf, but said greed is eventually punished.
Contains a loli-fied Dark Elf getting the dicking of her long-life and enjoying it thoroughly
I hope you'll enjoy it, as always, please do voice your opinion so I can improve.
Have a great one, waifus watch over you.
Tiny-bonus blogpost: The DElf's design and name are an obvious reference to pic related. Also, holy fuck, I re-wrote the first 3 pages at least 5 timesin the hope of giving to story it's own little dynamism, all of that only to not leave a good moment to add a blow-job scene I really wanted to write (because loli bj's are my fetish. Might just edit it in later.
Just in time for Easter?
Finally got around to finishing it. It was good, but I did notice some grammatical errors in it, especially in the last chapter. Are there any plans to continue it? Seems like an odd place to end the story.
Also, I would love if someone could help me out with my other inquiry >>389710
Finally finished the medusa story.
Hope you guys like it!
>plans to continue
I would like to finish it since it is my first proper written story. I have a few different ways I could take the story but I need to go over my outline and refine it some more since I want a good ending even if it isn't necessarily a happy one. Glad you liked it.
I remember fixing a lot of the grammatical issues in the latest chapter recently but I haven't bothered updating the .pdf yet. I'll showcase those fixes with the release of the next chapter…whenever that is
>space junker hellhound
Does not ring a bell but it sound like it might be cool.
Hello. Finished writing the epilogue of Victory and Defeat, which marks the end of both Victoria and Derrota's stories. Hard to believe All's Fair in Love and War started back in '16. Because it's the end of the story, I'll post again the starting chapters of both stories.
Victory and Defeat, Chapter 13
Victory and Defeat, Chapter 1
All's Fair in Love and War, Chapter 1
In theory, I'm done writing. I'd still want to rewrite Victoria's story, but it's not as critical as finishing an incomplete story.
Would the board be interested in soft-KC-canon stories about a band of knights hunting monsters in their pre-Demon Lord forms? I could properly try and tie it in to canon if possible.
I'd really like to write for this place again but I'm not really of a mind to write full-on smut.
To expand on this a little bit, I'm thinking of a setting wherein some monsters have reverted back to their monstrous forms and are causing trouble, and either the towns or the husbands themselves are hiring a group of professional monster hunters from the pre-Demon Lord days to capture the girls for treatment. That basic concept could be taken into a number of different settings, I think - just give me a monster and a setting idea and I'm good to go.
The sexual stuff would probably stay at a minimum though, so I'd really like to gauge reaction to this.
I'd say go for it, always good to have more OC on here, as long as it isn't some /chaos/ bullshit
Disgustingly saccharine, disturbingly wholesome, and dangerously cheesy…I like it.
The first few paragraphs remind me of something I wrote in the greentext threads.
Also good story. Medusas are underrated within the lamia catergory of Mge stories and this was really comfy to read.
I remember that story anon. It had a space-cop/AI duo who are captured by MG space pirates who use our space cop hero as some twisted reverse harem, with the hellhound captain as the main love interest. AI is killed off in the last part that appeared here, but I don't recall the writer continuing from that point.
You're giving me some good ideas Anon.
Dude wrote a fuck ton of stuff back when, but I haven't seen them around for a few years now :(
>In theory, I'm done writing.
I'll really miss your work. Stick around at least. Hopefully your muse will return, if not for /monster/ content than for something else.
It's been fun Los! I'm happy that you've stuck with us this long, and thank you for your contribution. The last three years have really flown by.
he's in the thread with the guy who wrote a book
Couple ideas I've been thinking about.
>Machine Spirit of a tank that's in love with an IG operator, but has trouble conveying this.
>Monster mom dealing with autistic son not being able to handle physical contact(or dad with autistic daughter)
>Young warrior tries to avenge his barbarian father, who died at the hands of the local vampire, but get's beaten repeatedly and receives escalating and embarrassing punishments.
>Future setting where Humanity forms a collation with monster races and each star trek-Esq ship is captained by a human and an alien wife.
<The wife is actually the entire ship.
>Lich runs a modern-day apothecary that helps people with various problems
>A long form story about monster girl fantasy.
>Starts with the hero betraying humanity, joining the Demon Queen, and killing off his party.
>His adoptive brother, who was more civic minded, leads the counter attack and instigates social reforms to counter monsters.
>One of these would be an order of knights drawing recruits from refugee men in exchange for giving their families shelter.
>They'd all carry around a book where they'd meticulously document the threat.
I've been reading up a little on Rome.
I don't keep track of pastebins or folders or anything like that. I know there's a couple anons that do, but I've got no way to point you in their general direction. I've quit threads/stories for a while now, so there's nothing new to add, and you haven't missed anything.
Why "kill off" that party when you can marry them off to monstergirls most befitting their #1 sexual/romantic preferences? One must consider all the potential angles after all? Why fight when you can win without firing a single shot?
Because if they're dyed-in-the-wool Orderlings, they'd attack him en masse as soon as they realize his defection? He probably doesn't get a choice.
That doesn’t eliminate his non-lethal methods of elimination. Hell, if his new demon lord gf has a demon silver weapon of any sort laying around, he could just use that. Or he could use the rest of her court staff to ambush them all at once and immediately subdue them.
>monster mom dealing with autistic son
Well there’s always mindflayers as a last-ditch option, but I assume she’d try anything else before that.
Marine Anon, gonna give another shot at writing again, all advice or criticism is welcome.
>be me, 0621 instructor standing at the top of hands and knees.
>Smoking a cigarette while watching all the junior Marines complain while crawling up hill.
>It's not that fucking hard, it's only 4 miles, you mostly walk up the hills anyway.
>It's not that fucking cold, no you can't wear your sweat top tomorrow.
>It's not that fucking early, 0530 wake up call is the norm in the Maine corps.
>How does each new group of Marines get lazier then the last?
>I look down at everyone struggling up the lose sand, sinking deeper with each step.
>I hate every single on of you so fucking much and it's the first day of class.
>Still gotta pick leadership though, I'll probably pick the PT stud as the the guide.
>I'll free ball the rest or something, I'm sure the motivated few will stand out.
>The first one to get up here is a zombie girl, PFC Cartwright, she gave a weak rah before putting her hands on her head.
>Wasn't aware the undead could sweat or breathe heavy, good to know.
Cartwright, what's your PFT? You're not that tall so you lose some points there.
>Between the heavy breathing she said she gets like 10 pull ups, 19 something 3 mile and max crunches.
>God damn, that almost impressed me, but being as short and skinny as she was, it wasn't unbelievable.
Alright, you made the cut. You're guide, now that doesn't mean it's set in stone. I'll switch you out in a heart beat if you aren't squared away.
>Give her a short brief on what the position means, being the example for everything, PT, studies, personal standers, all that.
>I didn't expect to much, she was probably gonna be switched out in the first few weeks.
>Still, she did stand a bit taller after she got the position.
>Said that is the first leadership role she's ever gotten. Said she won't let me down.
>I had my doubt about the last part, but, I was happy to know she'd take it seriously.
>I had to keep my eye on her, if she manged not to be a total fuck up, she might get meritorious Lance.
>Hell, shes even running back down to encourage the fat bodies.
>Maybe this class won't be that bad after all.
>Another cigarettes later everyone slowly makes it up, that last being a red oni girl.
>She's drenched in sweat and breathing so heavy she just might fucking die.
>I asked her name, because looking at her, I know for a fact she's gonna fail weigh ins.
>PVT Maxim, a Marine brat, I heard her brag about her Warren officer dad a few times.
>You'd think she would be in better shape, but I guess not.
>I stand back up, flick the butt of my last cigarette before facing my TSOC.
>I let them rest for awhile, telling Cartwright to stick with Maxim to make sure she doesn't actually die.
Alright, now for the run back, no one better fall out. This is almost all down hill so just keep up with me and it should be easy.
>With that I turn and start to run, everyone following me down the sharp decline back to barracks.
>I decided to cut them some slack and kept it at an easy cool down pace.
>No one else falls out, Maxim is pushed to her limits by my guide and nearly passes out when we stop.
>All in all, pretty good PT for the first day.
Okay, it's 0655 right now I want you formed up and ready to step at 0745, fall out.
Glad you both liked it.
Wrote a short story to try and pull myself out of writers block, not really sure what I want to do new after having dropped like five ideas within two weeks. The tones gonna be a lot different than my previous writings, hope you guys like it.
god I love .Less's art
Are there any stories of monstergirls using magical sleep/hypnosis/mind control while pro-actively dating their future husbands?
Seems like something that has plenty of potential: medieval fantasy setting, anon the military commander is preparing to counter an incoming mamono invasion, gets lewd dreams while in reality he's being violated by a succubus every night as anon becomes less and less willing to properly counter the invasion and instead ensures that his army will fall with as few casualties on both sides as possible. I think a succubus would be pervert for the story. Magic and the ability to fly should greatly help with infiltrating anon's quarters. First she would make sure he stays asleep using her magic. Then she'd straddle Anon and make him dream in which she'd appear and introduce herself. Kissing, etc would mostly reflect and various other lewd acts would mostly reflect what is actually happening in real life. I'm rambling, maybe I'm just a pervert who likes the idea of a cute sweetheart violating me in my sleep, I dunno.
>I think a succubus would be pervert for the story
The unintentional pun. But yeah, seconding this
Nightmares enter the dreams of the man they are interested in.
>autistic son not being able to handle physical contact
Why'd you have to remind me of me, anon?
Nothing's actually happened to me that would cause it, but I can't help but immediately dodge any sudden attempt at physical contact, including handshakes, hugs, and kisses.
Can't stop me from romanticising spontaneous physical displays of affection, though.
Figure I'll just post the pastebin link since it's where I'll be posting all the silly shit i type up. Be warned they aren't long stories, just brief moments that were too good for me to not write down while I could.
>Be commo pog
Why are Soldiers always stealing my waifus?!?!
Oh, god I read this trash after commenting, so I had to comment again to let you know this is trash. Exactly no one cares that you fumbled your way through boot. We all did, faggot, that's why we all know it isn't special and no one gives a shit. Pick something else to talk about. You just sound retarded.
Anyone who says that wholesomeness and cheese are just objectively bad are not worth paying attention to. Nihilism has no place here!
>We all did
What are you, part of some 3rd world country?
Why are fags better at American imperialism than DA TROOPS?
>We all did
Nigger the last time I checked this was Reddit you cock sucking homo.
This was fucking cute.
I love this kind of short stories
Ah so you're the one who wrote the shedding story. But all in all I'd enjoyed reading it. I like the slice of life aspect between the MC and MG waifu.
Does anyone have a copy of "Open (kunoichi, MGEverse, lewd)" by HumbleSacrifice?
That's the link, but the guy nagasaki'd his pastebin and all his stories.
Why did he do that? That story and the one with the spider are very good
Authors have a tendency to throw petulant shitfits at the slightest provocation.
Writing prompt I plan on maybe using later for a multi-part piece. Putting it here so I don't forget.
The crew (mix of monster and human) of a small freighter find a strange life pod broadcasting a faint signal in dead space. Inside they find a single half-dead man with extensive bionics.
He recently posted a new story.
Wonder if he's still around then?
>Orgasm denialfags BTFO
Did he had a cave spider story? (guy trying to set up bombs for the detonation of a cave full of spiders, but got proactive'd in the end)
Damn, i've been searching for that one-shot for so long, didn't know it may have been there
Well, fuck. It's been nearly three years. Good to know he's still kicking. Thanks for the heads up.
1,150 people looked at my shitty writing?
I've been told bots troll paste-bin. Organically you can expect at least 100 or so folks at most from /monster/ unless there's someone spreading your content outside the board.
>just get into It’s Not the Fall That Kills You
>last chapter is nearing 4 years ago with no ending
Hey everyone! I know I've been mostly in my corner doing my current CYOA, but I finally got the edits done for Wizardquest 1 and published it! If y'all read it before or wanted to read it, here's a much, much easier to read version than the initial version. Thanks to y'all who participated in the past and helped this happen.
The ebook is on amazon if you want to pick it up while the hardback I'm still waiting on the proof copy before I can start selling, etc.
shilling over, thanks.
That's a nice looking cover, and 80 percent of the buy decision is based on the cover so kudos on knowing where to expend your resources in the indie pub game.
Assuming it has done its job admirably, there's the last 20 percent, the pitch, the words on the back cover and/or the inside the front cover. Sell me my dude, because a few pew pew faggy 'umie mages about to get beaten down hardcore by a sexy Minotaur lady has my interest, can ya complete the "circuit" as it were and attract my attention though? I hope you deem it worthy of an attempt.
I am interested in a pitch as well. I'm curious about the way the game plays, dice system, mechanics, etc. How does it compare to D&D 2e, 5e, GURPS or any other popular system?
I don't think I could get a game together but I love collecting table top systems
Are you two new or do you just have difficulty reading? This is an ebook of the CYOA Ace did years ago. It’s not an rpg manual. And if you want the pitch or blurb or summary or whatever you call it on the back there is a brief description you can read if you would click on the link to the ebook.
Nah, just brain damage. My bad.
Very well Hero. As the other guy said, it is a clean up and printing of the first CYOA i ran here in… fuck it was 2015.
Wizardquest is a story of a man who reached the age of thirty as a virgin and became a Wizard with great powers. Content to stay at home and shitweave, he is forced to go on a quest when a hero breaks his communion glass. The outside world is dangerous however as it is filled with Monstergirls who would love nothing more than to rape him- and thus rob him of his magic forever.
The journey takes him far farther than he could imagine in this rich adventure filled with vibrant characters, a driving story, and rich humor.
Hailed by some as "The progenitor of a new kind of fantasy novel: Low Brow Fantasy" this story digs into some potty humor from our erstwhile hero, yet somehow it manages to fit will and give more life to the setting.
So please, consider purchasing this novel which clocks in at an impressive size that will leave you entertained for quite some time! Artwork included at the back of the book showing off many of the characters.
Okay, how's that?
Yep hw made that one. This is not acceptable! Did he really just say "fuck it" and burned all his work or was it just a mistake?
You've sold me on it
Will pick it up when I have the chance to read
Pretty good given the target audience. Get/keep magic powers or get laid roughly by sexy sexy monstergirls. Tough call. Don't ask for people to consider things though. Not a good marketing tactic. Find a better way to put that one.
Sounds kinda like an old raunchy pulp fiction piece as well. That's a good thing. Those bad boys sold like hotcakes back in their day. They're better than the BS coming out of the mainstream now by several country miles that's for sure.
I recently read wizardquest and illusionquest on tft. Good stuff. Will most likely buy a hardback when it becomes available.
Do you plan to release the other stories as books as well?
Aight! Ill drop the humility. Buy my book :^)
Thanks! I need to figure out how to price the hardback because its expensive to print. I'll have more info wednesday. Also, I'll eventually do the rest, but it takes me forever to edit and I'd like to put out a small short story anthology including the epilogue. I didn't have space for it, sadly. Thanks for reading though! Please leave a review. :^)
>7 dollary doos
That's a lot of content packed in there. I went ahead and purchased a copy. Once I've read enough of it to give it a proper take I'll give you the fairest review I can manage.
Thanks trips hitler
Leave a review too :^) Though apparently the reviews don't show for people who don't shop amazon for other stuff which is weird but makes sense.
Hi, I'm back to show you all more of my cheesy schlock. Hope you enjoy it.
Feedback is appreciated and all that.
Should I actually name the MC? I'm not sure you can connect as much to a character I name 'Anon'
Cross-posting here since the Hellhound thread seems dead:
The Mad Dog of The Apocalypse
A hellhound stalked John Milcorren. He knew running would accomplish nothing. He would never make it to town, no matter how fast his horse could carry him.
Less Than An Hour Earlier
From his soft leather chair, John first noticed the destruction as a shadow from the corner of his eye, a soft and sudden dimming of daylight. Darkness had begun to eclipse the skyline visible from his cabin window. A smudge of black haze in the distance marred the beautiful spring mid-morning, stretching from fine points on the ground, houses probably, to a single broad swath in the sky. The town, a few distant miles away, burned.
With luck, it would be only a spreading fire. Perhaps the result of some crone’s careless housekeeping or cooking had started it, or perhaps an errant coal kicked too far from the hearth or a lamp knocked into dry bedding. In that case, people, buildings, and possessions could be saved with enough swiftly delivered of manpower and technique. A simple fire held neither intelligence nor animosity. The alternative, much as he despaired to consider it, meant a far greater and more meaningful loss, and could only be quelled by the ultimately futile response of the Lord’s Hussars from another few miles to the north. Were that the case, as quick as they were, they would arrive to find the town’s militia slaughtered almost to a man. The Eastern Barbarian Tribesmen were not keen on taking prisoners… Only plunder.
As John pulled his crutch to his side with one hand, he positioned his wooden leg in front of him, ready to squarely carry the burden of his weight. The real one, the one it was meant to replace, had been taken from him last year which hastened his departure from military life. He set his crutch firmly onto the floor like an old wizard pounding his staff. Pushing against the armrest with his right hand, and pulling on his crutch with the other, he stood. He could still do that, at least. He was not an old man by any stretch of the imagination, but the war with the Tribesmen, and against the Varigath Warband before that, and a dozen other skirmishes along the borderland of the Empire had all robbed him of any sense youthfulness among other things. Constant warfare from the dawn of his youth had chewed him up and spit him out. He had been like lamb entering a meat grinder. He had come out as pulverized mutton with a wooden leg, some medals, and a small pension.
Collecting his well-worn arming-sword and shield from the mantle above his hearth, John strapped the kit to his back and made his way out his cabin door, securing it behind him. He saddled up to his sturdy but small draught-horse Tess, taking care to position himself in the stirrups without dislodging or otherwise misaligning his wooden leg. His first stop would be to his small homestead’s well where he kept an old wooden bucket. It might be useful in the hopeful event that he needed to join the townsfolk in quashing a simple fire. His sword and shield would only be cold comforts in the event of Barbarians or other Tribesmen. With a crutch under one arm, he couldn’t possibly wield both at once. Worse yet, years of continuous training had gone fallow over the past year in favor of chopping wood and hauling grain. His armaments would reassure him, but were capable of little else in his weathered hands.
Still, in that event, his best chance of survival would be joining the townsfolk in their pitiful resistance. His home could be clearly seen from the town, just as he could clearly see the town burn in the distance. Staying at his homestead while the town withstood attack would leave him vulnerable and alone, a surest death as if he had fallen on his own sword. But that was not his reason in going. He did not fear death. No… Many days he welcomed it. He took perverse pleasure in reliving fantasies day after day of dying in battle, heroically on his feet. It was sweet fantasy a world apart from his present hell of dying one piece at a time. He would to defend the town because it was expected of him as a Soldier, not because of any safety it brought, and always in the hopes that his fantasies could be made reality.
Scarcely a minute into his journey along the road to town and he slowed his steed’s gallop to a trot, then halted her altogether. A veteran’s intuition from a short lifetime of constant battle had begun to nag at him. It came on softly at first, then stronger and stronger, until he had finally stopped to assess the situation. Realization had hit him like a battering ram. Were it a fire alone, there would be even-toned shouting and little else. Were it wild tribes of men or foreign invaders, there would screams of rage and panicked wailing. What John heard on the wind, he would never forget: shouts, pleading, growls, moans, and sick, twisted laughter. Momano had taken the town.
Worse than any other foe, he feared the momano. Though he cared little for his life any longer, he would prefer to keep his soul, which would surely be forfeit if he fell at their hands. And what he had seen, what they had done to his friend, how those memories hounded him constantly, all weighed heavy on his mind. Just the thought of seeing momano again started his his hands to shaking, swaying Tess’s reigns like they were caught in the midst of a soft breeze.
Just about the only enemy he had tangled with that hadn’t robbed a piece of him had been the momano… Although they had tried harder than any of the others. The difference had been that they had the unnerving tendency to capture their enemies alive, often as willing as not, through either brute force, corruption of the mind, or both. There had been a time when John had a hardy constitution, far more than most men, both mentally and physically.
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Six Years Ago
John felt the barb pierce his side. It didn’t hurt, and he didn’t expect it to. It had been described as a firm pressure at the site of the wound that drove a man mad with lust. He knew now the truth in those words. It had been errantly flung along with a dozen others by single large manticore warrior, no doubt hoping to claim a few more of his fleeing men. He could perhaps resist the barb’s effects long enough to reach his retreating unit’s rally-point. Had he been a normal man, or had he been the sole focus of the barb’s owner, he would not have held out any hope of making it home that day.
But his dearest friend Michael, and immediate subordinate, would not be so lucky. Not only had he taken a barb too, but the manticore warrior had found its target in him. Like a shark picking out a single fish from a school, she pursued him with the intensity of a starving predator. His friend would make the ultimate sacrifice for God and Empire.
It’s attention solely on Michael, the tall manticore tackled the man to the ground and began tearing into his armor with its claws and tail, driving no less than half a dozen spines in the man’s chest in the process. He tried to pull his friend free but he could not be budged under the beast’s grip. There was no hope for the man. The manticore’s tail was already in place, ravishing his friend to the sound of his own screams. He would be taken back to the beast’s lair, food for the growing life that Michael himself was unwillingly siring inside the hellion’s womb at this very moment.
John’s sword heavy in his hand, he considered dispatching his friend for the preservation of his soul and honor, and to deny the beast her offspring. It was his duty, his requirement after all. He sheathed the weapon instead, knowing well enough the task’s impossibility. The manticore warrior would never permit it, for one. Not only had she effectively obstructed Michael from any angle of effective dispatch, but she would almost certainly block such an attack. For another, it would only get them both killed, whether or not he was successful. The beast would see him as a threat to her prey and react immediately. It was also no secret that men taken by momano ended their lives in blinding ecstasy, as was obviously the case with his dear friend. Better to die that way, John reasoned, than by the cold steel of a friend’s sword. Of course, the most important reason John refused to act was simple selfishness. He could not bring himself to raise a hand against his friend, no matter the consequences.
Instead, he ran to the rally-point, unnoticed, he hoped, by the ravaging monstrosities strewn about the battlefield. He was not alone among the survivors. His whole unit had either routed with him or been set-upon like his dear friend, soon to be captured and devoured. This had been their best possible outcome in the face of stumbling into a surprise mamono attack. They were unprepared for such a fight, and the mamono had been all but unstoppable since their new commander had been appointed.
>thread hit bump limit back in December
You could always start a new thread with your story. I'm guessing you are new here?
I will do that. Thank you. How do you tell if it hit the bump limit?
Bump limit's 400 posts on this board.
Good stuff, anon. It’s cute and a just sad enough to accentuate the cuteness.
Also that ending made me laugh for about 5 minutes like a retard
Glad you like it, part two should be coming out soon, probably tomorrow.
https://pastebin.com/T7mYkj0p/-'Don't be afraid'
https://pastebin.com/G8xcUyW0/-'The Witch of Hithercombeshire'
If anyone has a copy of these archived somewhere, I'd really, really, really appreciate it
Not really sure of my drawfag skills, but I could offer an (eventual) request as thanks
Don't be afraid
The witch of Hithercombeshire
My retarded ass can't do one thing right, damn